Show vs Tell
One of the stories I worked on recently was a “retarget” of a story that I had originally intended as a picture book but decided would make a better story. After some comments by an editor I ended up rewriting the ending of the story and what had originally been one line became a whole other scene.
Then I was bothered by the end of a story I was reading in my critique group when another member said a few words and suddenly I realized– Good old show versus tell.
My original ending might have worked for a picture book because in my head I’d “seen” the final scene in pictures. Yikes! There it was — show vs tell, the old “half the story is in the pictures,” the whole nine yards.
But I couldn’t see it until I’d done it for myself. Just “telling” me about it didn’t click — I had to *do* it.