Blogfest week 2 story chain

My assignment: subplot closure
my words jail, concubine, heave

Dio remembered how her stomach had heaved from the feeling of Tony’s hand over her mouth. Who was Tony, and who was Sandy? Dio grimaced. If she could, she’d whisk the two of them off to jail and let the blankety-blank police figure out who they were. As she twirled a lock of hair around her finger, she remembered the name of a club back home. The Concubine. That’s where she’d seen Tony – tending bar at the damn club. She’d look up the phone number as soon as she got home. Right now she had some flying to do.

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13 Responses to Blogfest week 2 story chain

  1. Alleged Author says:

    Hee hee…I sense she’s gonna kick some booty!

  2. Donna K. Weaver says:

    lol Short and sweet.

  3. Deana says:

    I was about to say the same thing Cara:)

    Woot! I like it:)

  4. Deana says:

    Oh and Margaret, so sorry for the mix up. I need to learn to say no:)

    I thought your post was awesome put together so fast and all.

  5. lindy says:

    Not sure why, whether it be the phrase “blankety-blank police”, the twirling of the hair, or the nightclub, there’s a swanky feel to this. I enjoyed your segment. I’d call it “Short and sassy!”

  6. Lora Rivera says:

    Yes! I’m a huge fan of the sass in this, and I love that you grabbed the feel of his hand over her mouth. So intrusive and scary! Great digging deeper into her POV a bit more.

  7. siv maria says:

    Short and fun, hard words to work in but you did it well!

  8. I had a blast writing it. Fitting in Concubine was a challenge, especially at 8:45 PM.

  9. Stephanie M says:

    I love how you used your words, especially Concubine. Looks like Dio has some serious bad guy butt kicking to do.

  10. Catherine Johnson says:

    Very hard words, you did a great job weaving them in and added a lot of depth to the story too.

  11. Maisha Cultice says:

    lol go figure

  12. Kristi Bernard says:

    Great job!

  13. Belle Hamann says:

    I never would have thought how much information you could find out there about this! Thank you for making it all simple to understand